Screenwriting Diary: Excerpt from "Twitch"

Slowly this script is coming along. It's a spec I'm writing for the market in hopes of finding representation, and it's a crime thriller (or a "Noir Romance" described by a few). I started writing it about a year ago and have done about 4 drafts so far, and each one has been drastically different than that previous.

I'm feeling like it's almost there. Here's a few scenes that have survived each changed so I feel safe to give you a taste...

Twitch in the screenplay section